Once there was a girl could Rebecca was going into a hot living volcano. She got a ladder so she can feel what is like in there. She said that it feels like it is steaming hot! Then Rebecca saw it night time then she went home. When it was morning Rebecca went back to the volcano and she got her hover board and she surfed in the volcano and she had straps around her feet so she would not go in the lava. Rebecca had on electric gloves on because she wants to hit it on the lava wall in the volcano. She only want to hit it on the wall because she thinks it is fun. Rebecca saw it night time again and she went home and she fell asleep. The next day Rebecca came to the volcano and she saw it melting in the volcano and it was boiling in the volcano. Rebecca went home and put something cold so she would not get hot or sick. When Rebecca came back she saw it melting again but she was all right and she surfed in the lava and she did not do it fast because she will get hurt. She did it very carefully and the lava was going bigger and bigger and bigger suddenly...the lava flooded and everything is melting and the lava was almost going to Rebecca's house and then Rebecca fell and something catches her and it was a...JET PACK. She was so excited and she was very luck that all the jet packs saved everyone and they flew all the way to a airplane and everyone want to keep the jet packs and the people had jet packs they flew out and went to the lava but they didn't touch the lava and they were only half way and they went to another street and it had a volcano and it will never flud again. Rebecca and her family saw a house with a brick wall and a giant brick house and it has lots of rooms. THE END
From Adelei
From Adelei
Hi Adelei
ReplyDeleteWow! Going into a steaming, hot volcano would be very interesting! I am glad Rebecca found a jet pack so she could fly out of the volcano. Aren't you clever for writing a story on your blog in the holidays! Awesome job!
I like the descriptions you have used to describe the volcano.
Can you check your spelling for me? Is it "could" you need in your first sentence or 'called"?
I a wondering where did Rebecca get the ladder from?
I hope you are enjoying your holidays!
From Mrs Natusch
Hi Adelei
ReplyDeleteI can see you've been very busy during your term break writing - well done! I really liked the way your story showed us a problem for the character Rebecca, and then you solved this problem too. As a reader, I got very worried when she was surfing on the lava as it got bigger and bigger! But then, I felt relieved when she found the JET PACK! great solution :)
Thanks for sharing this with us.
From Mrs Paton
Hi again Adelei
ReplyDeleteI tweeted this link to my teacher friends so keep checking to see if you get comments!
Mrs Natusch
PS - I think Mrs Paton has commented! ;)