Tuesday, April 16, 2013

Sam and the floaty alien on the moon

Sam fell asleep and he had a dream.Sam 's dream was about himself and his friend the floaty alien.
Sam went in his rocket to go to the spotty moon and he saw his friend the floaty alien.When Sam got out of his rocket but before Sam got out of the rocket Sam needed to go his lunch so didn't starve and also the alien. When Sam got out Sam did not see the alien and when Sam jumped Sam was floating in the air. The alien popped his head out because he smelt sandwiches. Sam and the alien felt happy.They had lunch together on the moon. When Sam got in his rocket he went home. When Sam woke up he was back home with his family and he was excited.

Thursday, April 11, 2013

Dark and spooky

There is a rock footpath. When you stand on it, it feels  hard like a strong tree. The green grass is spiky grass it feels like soft green grass or it feels cold grass. There's a roof it's made out of tree twigs from big trees or small trees. It feels like the trees a rough and wiggly. When I was walking along the bridge I looked in the water and suddenly ... I fell! in the water and I got wet so I got up on the bridge and went through the forest and I went back home to dry myself off. Then tomorrow I go to the forest and go back to the tree house. When I woke up I walked through the forest then I was at the tree house. I walked inside and the door was squeaky. When I got inside it was hot then I saw someone did something I did not know what it was so I checked it out and it was ... fire fire someone set  the house on fire . Fire is so bad to touch you get burnt. I went outside and look at the darkness.
It was spooky outside. It was spooky outside because there was no one around me. I was scared there was no one around me and I thought there was a fish monster all! around me. And I thought there was a giant going to stand on me and scwish me but... It! is morning time because I sleped in the tree house. I left the fire on so I get warm. The fire is good to wom you and I brought a Blanket with me. And I dreamed about those things. So I went through the forest and went home and find my togs and have a swim in the river only it has nothing in the river. And the river was clear. I went to go and have a swim because it was a nice day.


This is my draft piece of writing. Please leave a comment about what I did well and what I need to work on.