Thursday, May 29, 2014

Archie Smith, Boy Wonder

This is a story and I wrote it with my buddy in Wisconsin.
What do you like about our story?

1 comment:

  1. Wow Adelei - the pictures including Archie Boy Wonder are my favourite. I always get my classes to use them in our writing.
    I love the way you have used paragraphs to separate out the parts of the story and showed the passing of time by using words like after, as soon as, then...

    Lots of information can be added by saying how Archie said it or what he was doing as he said it.
    Archie whispered "Goodbye," to his mother as tears welled in his eyes and he turned to enter the space-ship.